This was our first version....but...after feedback, we changed up some of the dangling feet shots... We also added a positive message at the end... which prompted us to change the title.
Frank MaggiMar 17, 2010 2:34 PM
This is dark, but it is powerful and important. I was impressed with the "acting"; it didn't seem like typical middle schoolers reciting lines. I also liked the sound work—really excellent. I feel the text usage is weak. I'd make it bigger and if possible make the "Hurts" zoom big. Really hit you in the face with it. I also think the dangling feet should do a long fade; the cut to still frame was jarring to me. This is really good filmmaking.
tamarawhitney
Mar 17, 2010 11:01 AM
This was our first version....but...after feedback, we changed up some of the dangling feet shots... We also added a positive message at the end... which prompted us to change the title.
Frank Maggi
Mar 17, 2010 2:34 PM
This is dark, but it is powerful and important. I was impressed with the "acting"; it didn't seem like typical middle schoolers reciting lines. I also liked the sound work—really excellent. I feel the text usage is weak. I'd make it bigger and if possible make the "Hurts" zoom big. Really hit you in the face with it. I also think the dangling feet should do a long fade; the cut to still frame was jarring to me. This is really good filmmaking.